“To Honor the Sun”

secret rites enacted in a remote valley
are known only to the extent
that the revelers will allow it

their temple a sunken ruin
releases no sound as figures converge
within the airy shrine

two souls tarry behind the wall
their flesh ripened by Ra’s heated kiss
features hewn from desert stone

shrill voices creak and cry ancient songs
devotions lift words strung together
too closely to be deciphered

outside, one of Ra’s suntouched
lofts a feather, an offering to
their undying father, a gift of praise

now they join the others within
approaching the altar
the initiates join their hands

thick braids bound at the nape
sliced in supplication
as head is severed from heart

crimson stains the mortar again
pools, and infuses the earth
the knotted grass drinks in death

When Shawna posted another Midweek Melting I was thrilled, and decided to challenge myself to use all the words, and in order. The words are “remote extent sunk release shrine tarried ripen hewn creak strung loft braid nape mortar knot”.  I didn’t know when I started writing it where the story was taking me, and was somewhat pleasantly surprised by it, but then realized it also connected to Think Tank Thursday #98, which asks us to explore the meaning of ‘honor’.

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5 thoughts on ““To Honor the Sun”

  1. This is a fantastic prompt mashup. I used the words in exact order, too. Wonderful. I love the word bump of “feather” and “father,” the vivid imagery, and these lines: “flesh ripened by Ra’s heated kiss
    features hewn from desert stone”

    Great write.

  2. I love the sound of these two lines together:

    “within the airy shrine
    two souls tarry behind the wall”

    I also really like these:

    “bound at the nape
    sliced in supplication
    as head is severed from heart”

    “the knotted grass drinks in death”

    I’m glad you joined in again, Tania. Your poems are always a delight to read.

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