“Blackbirds Singing at the Break of Day”

in the beginning

something ensued

a peculiar assemblage of crows

in the beginning

there, behind the bungalow

within the avian’s demesne

I saw them

in the beginning

the dalliance was furtive

myriad figures, erstwhile lovers


between branches

in the beginning

the morning air

redolent with the scent of earth

and rain

dawn’s breath caressing

a susurrus ripple of sound

in the beginning

their play

evanescent, ephemeral

their voices

cacophonous, evocative of pleasure

of delight

eloquence in their effervescent call

Inspired by the rather timely presence of a flock of blackbirds in the trees behind my house, a common occurrence that never fails to delight me though many might find their song noisy and annoying.  Shared with the wonderful folks at Sunday Scribblings #319, who encouraged us to use the phrase ‘in the beginning’ and also with Rosemary Mint’s Monday Melting, which gave us 100 beautiful words to choose from. I’ve italicized the ones I nabbed. Took out the italics, ’cause Shawna’s right, they’re distracting.



5 thoughts on ““Blackbirds Singing at the Break of Day”

  1. These are my favorite lines:

    “a peculiar assemblage of crows”
    “redolent with the scent of earth”
    “dawn’s breath caressing”

    I also like the indentations, leaving “in the beginning” flush left.

    You misspelled “bungalow” and “erstwhile.” So you might want to fix those. And I find the italics to be rather distracting.

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